This story originally was only 3,000 words back in 2002 when I wrote it for an assignment, but as I went over that rather skeletal framework these last few weeks it grew and is still growing.
I'm intrigued! I think the POV changes are timed well and allow the story to unfold almost like a dialogue between the two characters, each with their own part of the story to reveal. I was initially a little confused when "she" became "they" in the next scene, though that was eventually explained. Hope you had a happy birthday and thanksgiving! Congrats on the printer :-)
I'm intrigued! I think the POV changes are timed well and allow the story to unfold almost like a dialogue between the two characters, each with their own part of the story to reveal. I was initially a little confused when "she" became "they" in the next scene, though that was eventually explained. Hope you had a happy birthday and thanksgiving! Congrats on the printer :-)